Breathe, breathe, live Breathe in that vial air That seems to surround you Breathe and with it live
Call to that hidden place From deep within you Pull on that forbidden power And breathe till the next day
Don’t break, don’t fall apart Once you do; everything Everything will be gone So breathe and forget about your heart
Doth seen to be departed Let them go, don’t hold tight And breathe, breathe To live another life
RaynePhoenix Temp. Admin
Posts : 37 Joined : 2009-05-24 Vampire :
No
Subject: Re: Breathe Mon Jun 01, 2009 8:59 am
Nice.
It made me feel like I was struggling to breathe myself...
kaname Junior
Posts : 32 Joined : 2009-03-26 Vampire :
Yes
Subject: Re: Breathe Mon Jun 01, 2009 9:02 am
that was beautiful love
BloodRayne Newbie
Posts : 8 Joined : 2009-02-27
Subject: Re: Breathe Sat Jun 06, 2009 5:22 pm
wow, I found that to be a very nice poem and I agree with RaynePhoenix, I felt the urge to take a giant breath because I couldn't breathe really well. That is weird how a poem can do that to you. I sometimes feel the pain of people as they (sometimes) say thing that places them as the main character in their poem.
Elsie Junior
Posts : 26 Joined : 2009-04-19 Vampire :
Yes
Subject: Re: Breathe Sat Jun 06, 2009 11:17 pm
Thank you all very much. I am glad you all enjoyed it.
Subject: Breathe 
Mon Jun 01, 2009 8:33 am
